Conclusion - Self Check Skills

Author’s Note:  This is the final self-check skill that I am attempting to master.  I am going to try to master the skill of creating a sample conclusion for a paper.  I am going to use the thesis statements that I wrote in the thesis statement self-check skill.  I am also going to write down what my three body paragraphs are about before writing about the conclusion.  My goal is to master this skill.

Topic:  Why School should Start Later

Thesis Statement: In order to have success and have students focused during the day, school should start later.

Topic for Body Paragraph 1:  What are some of the reasons why school should start later

Topic for Body Paragraph 2: Studies that Have Been Done

Topic for Body Paragraph 3:  Results of the Studies 

Conclusion:  The studies have shown, and the results have come in. But why have school administrators not acted yet? The younger kids don’t need as much sleep as a teenagers, yet they make the teenagers go to school earlier during the day.  Also, the focus levels have improved and the grades of the students have improved too. So it is time for the school administrators to act to improve the overall grades so they can go in a positive direction for middle school and high school students.

Topic:  Why we should Protect our National Parks

Thesis Statement: Preserving the National Parks is something that should continue, because many animals live in the parks and they contain beauty that can be found nowhere else in the country.

Topic for Body Paragraph 1:  History of the National Parks

Topic for Body Paragraph 2: Animals that live in the Parks

Topic for Body Paragraph 3: The Popularity of the parks and Some of the Top Attractions 

Conclusion:  The National Parks make up some of the best beauty in the world.  Millions of people come to visit these parks every year for the joy of seeing something different.  Many unique animals live only in specific national parks, so we would need to protect their homes too. In order to protect these parks, the government should continue to invest money in protecting all the National Parks that our country has so they can be enjoyed for generations to come.  It was Theodore Roosevelt’s idea in 1906 to preserve areas of land to protect what is inside to people could see, and today that idea worked out perfectly.

Stong Thesis Statement - Self Check Skills

Author’s Note:  This is another self-check skill that I am going to try to master. I am going to try to master the skill of creating a strong thesis statement for a sample paper. I am only going to be writing the introduction for the piece. My goal is to try to master this skill.  

Topic:  Why School should Start Later in the Day

You are in your third hour class.  You are tired because you went to bed really late the previous night and your body didn’t get enough sleep. This is the feeling that many kids during their school day. Too many times there are students who don’t get enough sleep, so they aren’t focused during the school day. In order to have success and have students focused during the day, school should start later.     

    

Topic:  Why we should Protect our National Parks 

The incredible rock formations, mountains, bodies of water and rare animals are what make our country’s National Parks. The natural parks in our country contain some of the best beauty in the world. These parks have been under construction for thousands of years, creating what we see today. Preserving the National Parks is something that should continue, because many animals call the parks their home and they contain beauty that can be found nowhere else in the world.  

The Harder you Work the Greater the Results

Author’s Note: This is a text analysis to a short quote by Muhammad Ali.  I am going to reflect upon the quote on what it means to me as an athlete. 

 "I hated every minute of training, but I said, 'Don't quit. Suffer now and live the rest of your life as a champion."

Training is never easy, it is everyone’s least favorite part about the sport they play.  But it is what you do off the field that improves you game the most. Put all your energy and focus into training because it’s going to help you in the future.  No matter how hard the journey is, don’t quit.  If you work hard now, the results will come. The improvements that you have made will show in your play.  As long as you put in your best effort when you play, you will feel like a champion for the rest of your life.  

Assuming Things Creates Many Problems

Author’s Note: This piece is my spring district writing assessment. The topic that I am writing about is how as humans, we can’t assume anything in life. I am going to be connecting several life scenarios to a short story in literature. Look for an overall improvements in this piece from my district piece in the fall. I am going to work on the correctly using commas and colons in my writing. 

Our brain is contently taking on many different tasks. Sometimes they are very large tasks and sometimes they are small. When the brain takes in several smaller tasks at one time, it sometimes bypasses the task and just assumes that someone knows how to do the specific task or that it will get done on its own. Often times in life people assume things when they shouldn’t. Sometimes the thought of assuming can turn out to be a good thing, but most of the time it goes wrong. Assuming that something will get done or that you are right is a poor habit that many people in this country have, and due to people assuming things major events have occurred that have ended up costing people their lives.  

In our country, the President is a major political figure and popular name. In office, the President has a major responsibility on his hands: he has to take care of our country through good times and bad. Some people aren’t happy with how the President runs the country, and that causes people to make threats on the life of the President.  Today these threats are taken very seriously, but back in the 1800’s they weren’t. Though, back in the mid 1800’s, we assumed that the President was safe and that no one would want to assassinate him. It was not until 1865 when the first assassination of a President occurred.  Within the next 40 years, two more Presidents would be assassinated in office.  The assassination of President Kennedy in 1963 was the turning point of security for the President.  From this day on, lots of money would be spent to help keep the President safe wherever he is.  Assuming that the President is safe has caused a lot of trouble; four lives have been taken, but the security has improved and now we know that the President is safer than ever.   

The safety of the President is always something that people used to assume, but for a while people assumed that sporting events and local places were safe too. It was back in the day when people could go to a professional sporting event or to the local gathering place and not have to worry about anything.  But now because of all of the violence in the world, you cannot go to a professional sports game without being searched for some sort of weapon. Just recently, there were the bombings at the Boston Marathon. This tells you that supporting a runner on the streets of Boston isn’t safe anymore. Also, threats have been made of bombing the Olympics, so there has been an increased amount of security at these events.  Plus fans have gotten beaten up and shot after sporting events, and the injuries have been very severe and sometimes fatal. Recently there was a shooting outside the Empire State Building in New York City. Several people were injured and killed.  This occurred in broad daylight on the streets of the most populated city in our country.  Times have changed, the development of weapons has changed, and now many places that we love to go to are no longer safe.  

The short story “Humans are Different” has the a similar theme of don’t assume anything. The story is about a robot who is on a field trip to an inner planet.  There, the robot meets the last human ever to exist. The robot and the human grow to become good friends during their time together.  But one day the human gets sick. The robot said that he would try to fix the human. So the robot tried to fix him as if he was a robot, by performing the steps of fixing the robot on the human. The robot jammed a needle into the back of the human’s neck, the human turned off, like the robot planned. Then the robot opened the human up and realized that the human was built different inside. The robot ended up killing the human, when he didn’t mean to. The robot assumed the human was built the same way he was, so he tried fixing him as if he was a robot, and it ended up costing him a good friend.   

In our daily lives, there are too many times that people make assumptions. Whether they assume that someone else will get the report done, or make the catch in baseball, they assume that the specific task will get done by another person. Too often your brain gets overwhelmed with thoughts that are both big and small. Your brain makes assumptions with the smaller thoughts, so it can make room for the more important tasks. It is always important to confirm that you are right instead of assuming, because if you don’t something could go wrong.